I find it odd that they would mourn the date he founded their house of worship."Our founding Shepherd, Father Beeman - Let us not mourn the date he left this world, but the date he founded our house of worship: the 8th month of 717"
Perhaps: "Our founding Shepherd, Father Beeman - Let us not mourn the date he left this world, but remember the date he founded our house of worship: the 8th month of 717"
One of the "line"s should be removed, needs a space before the "-", and because the text after the semicolon should be an independent clause, it should have a subject (I used "it" for my example).There is a horizontal line arcing line across the plate- above the line is a skill; below is an outline of a small being.
How about:
There is a horizontal arcing line across the plate - above the line is a skull; below it is an outline of a small being.
I wonder what I could of found if I was actually looking for mistakes.